I am learning to use the correct structure and language for recount writing.
25/07/17
At Te Aho’s house.
On Saturday morning my family and I went to Te Aho's house in Okaihau for the holidays. When we got there I saw a lot of people there. I felt happy and keen. First my brother and I asked Te Aho and Komene if they could catch the horse for us to ride. He said, “Yes I will go and catch the horse for you.” Next they caught the horse for my brother and I. Then we rode the horse. It was so fun riding the horse. Then Pimero came outside to hop on the horse for a ride. She said, “It is so fun.” Finally we all went inside for a drink because we were thirsty.
Hello Huhana nice story but the only thing you need to do is add more detail to your story and you need to add more structure and language. Blog you later. Keep the blogging up.
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